Lady Sydney

6/10 Cute, but nothing too unique about it.

Very interesting choice in Art, Dreamer. I think this is pretty cool, and I'm going to take a wild guess that your sister's hand is... whichever one is the smallest ...

Everyone's covered all the bases that you need to improve this... a lot. So, I will not echo. Keep trying. ~*Sydney*~

This is a late thank you, smorg, but I don't think this will continue for a while. I have a novel that I'm working on, it's called "Heiress" if you ...

I liked it a lot, but it seems like it could be better. Some lines could express your, or whoever the poem is referring to, feelings a lot better with ...

Nicely done, but as Cade said, you could work on "Wow"ing us. ^_^ I'm pretty sure we all know what a cloud is, but in your own eyes, do you ...

I won't repeat what you already know, which is what everyone above has already mentioned, so I will just say... keep trying. And it is also preferred that your posts/replies ...

Ah. I understand what you mean. ^_^ Well, if that's the case, then you did well. You're welcome, by the way. ~*Sydney*~

Ooh. Quite moving! ^_^ I really enjoyed this. I didn't see anything that you needed to fix. I'm just a reader with her own nitpickyness (if that's a word) and ...

Thanks yoha_ahoy! ^_^

Hey! Welcome to the addictive world of YWS. ^_^ It's great to have you here with us. I'm Sydney. If you have any questions, feel free to PM me at ...

Ah. I see what you mean. Thanks!

Ditto with Cade. We see this kind of poetry so much that it needs its own category/forum thing. Be original with your work and post something that'll blow us away ...

That was really well done, but you've got work on your capitalization and punctuation. :wink: I enjoyed this though. Keep it up! ~*Sydney*~

This is a little late, but thank you a bunch for your critiques! I'm thinking about publishing this soon, so all comments are welcome. The good and the bad, the ...